I offer here feedback I receive by mail after reading the book. I will obviously
here to view the positive comments as negative comments.
- Regis, 14 June 2010
I devoured your book this weekend and I sincerely congratulate you for it.
I really wanted to become an alpha man.
I loved this alternation between these descriptions informed of your journey and these insights on the condition of man toward women. A book on initiation of a sudden and now I have in my briefcase as a kind of rosary that I turn the pages from time to time to immerse myself in a passage or a quote that echoes in me.
Again, congratulations!
- Jean-Yves, 24 February 2010:
Hi Julien. I finished your novel. Well then, the overall impression: I really enjoyed it. I love traveling, and Asia is the only continent that I have not visited. So obviously The information that you give the utmost interest me. There are many points that have caught my attention, and that's good. I like the tone that you gave your novel, it is educational content but without the fuss. Regarding the "seduction technique" for me it's ultimately not the main subject of the story. There are several topics in your novels that revolve around human relationships.
- Fabrizio, February 13, 2010:
Hello!
I just wanted to congratulate you for your book. very nice to read and full good lessons!
short, one feels the book in the same friendly tone on your posts and it's great fun.
- Amadour, February 13, 2010:
- Gregory, 11 February 2010:
I almost finished writing your book, I have not had much time but the first time that I opened, I have not managed to stop before the 116th page!
In any case, it reads well, and it's nice. I love the culture passages country, it gives an added dimension, and I really feel to be there! After having seen your photos on the blog, it helps to imagine the scenes when you speak of terracotta warriors, the wall and everything else.
aspect seduction is launched via the arrival in the hostel, it happens not in a heavy way, again it gives a good impression to be there! I like!
I would close my return when finished.
[... February 13]
's it, I finished!
I finished the book in one go, because overall, as the beginning, the end reads well, because we really want to know how your character finishes his education!
So congratulations on the job!
By cons, to be honest, I found 1 or 2 transitions a little faster ... gender transition with the explanation of aikido that leads to the transfer of energy ... and suddenly we enter the social energies. After reassure you, j'imagine bien la complexité à gérer le mix entre les passages séduction, les passages culturels, et les voyages...
Mais globalement, au risque de me répéter, ca se lit très bien, on s'attache vite au personnage, on veut savoir comment il va évoluer, mais aussi ou il va évoluer ! Vraiment COOL, t'as géré !
- Benoît, 23 janvier 2010 :
What I liked: *
the historical passages, I have always loved ptites anecdotes and history in general, so I am the perfect target audience
* the advocacy of seduction and not chopage Barbary, and the parallel drawn with the social relations in general
* mixing road movie / initiation, with a interesting main character progression
* the enigmatic character of Erik, and his ambiguous relationship with Hugo
* geographical descriptions, it makes you want to go on now, especially since they are not only blissful contemplation of the wonders of the world. The presence of criticism and negative aspects for me is a definite bonus
* the parallel drawn between seduction and sports defense
* see your name on the cover
* see your face on the cover
What I liked least : *
few typos (errors, missing words or duplicates), but nothing serious
* The beginning a little mess, the real start of the book arriving at the meeting with Erik
* Asymmetry reports between the two main characters, learning Krav Maga is too episodic. I found that there was room for more digging in this direction, but this is only my personal opinion. *
it ends too soon !!!!!!!!!!!!
- Alexis, January 18, 2010:
And then there is not only that, the story is well constructed, with all the historical info is really interesting!
- Hadrian, January 18, 2010:
I keep preciously in my hard drive (purchased in PDF format) so you can refer me if my memory had to fail!
Now, as Erik said, it is time to practice!
- John David, 13 January 2010:
This does not happen with you for one simple reason: you have a pen my bastard. A real feather.
You have real talent and I beg you not to give up writing what we can tell you.
No brush stroke in this intro, just the facts. Under this transparency I will also discuss the weaknesses of your novel (which bene amat, bene castigat).
[I mask this passage to avoid spoilers in history ...]
You are very strong because you have a quality that I love as a reader: you're a good storyteller. You take me by the hand and I follow you with delight. I feel the pleasure / wetness / excitement / discovery, and I find myself regretting the times when you go back to your main theme (seduction).
I liked the cultural references, anecdotes and humor and I reveled in some situations
So I renew my congratulations Julian. But I insist you have a real talent why I might be critical. Some professional writers recently disappointed me and you you got me surprised. So a huge GG! Continues to write you a loyal reader .
- Cecilia, January 12, 2010:
cons you told me that s aimed primarily at people below 35 years, but I think a little c reducer and you had to forget all these quarantine divorced woman was with them since treente years and which suddenly no one has been seduced not really a woman during all these years .. . Look at the state of mind is Hugo after his break so imagine these men in what state they should be! S not forget the bike but after 2to years without having his c drive anyway to get back in the saddle!
For historical passages c although they are not condensed enough soporiphiques and m are things I learned Resort the blow of Lucky Strike fags) and j etai surprised that learned g for Easter Island.
- Noemie, 12 January 2010:
I just finished it just now.
So congratulations already! Because it's not easy to write a book and I would find the very original.
for following the "real" world tour was a bit lost because it was quite difficult to see the boundary between fiction and reality ... but I learned a lot of stuff I've reviewed other (as I read around the globe) and I had a good time to read it so I wanted to share the same worry if you do not know much.
I'll be able to tell the stories in the evening with you distill all over (yes I like to tell it in the evening) and I'll talk about your techniques to drag my friends ...
- Gabrielle, Nov. 28, 2009 (reading of the manuscript v4):
No.
I admire the honesty that you do and show sincerity that you put there.
Like many cultural crossings, especially as there were a number I had already read the blog, and I've reread with pleasure, which proves that style is more enjoyable and not just teaching in your way of telling.
Otherwise I think your style is a bit tight and less pleasant to see heavy. Especially in the dialogues, which are often an opportunity to stage pieces of the mystery method, and we turn to the manual for personal development. In addition to digressions on human alpha are quite repetitive. Finally, to be honest, you do a lot of syntax errors (I am not sure not to make a format as long by the way), and some of your phrases spoken somewhat weaken the story.
I did not manage to feel sympathy for Hugo, and the novel of initiation remained quite childish in my opinion, very West-centered. Ex, you t'emeus the plight of Aborigines and the problems you complain of travel comfort back pack on a page 6 ...
Although I think you have to rebosser, I think if you want it, you must publish it because he can meet his little success. In the trade it's called a product "Main stream", ie something "that consensus is a real trend and well formatted. Me, Gabrielle, I do not usually main stream, main stream and I do not mean 7 to 77 years. I hear that your book may meet a strong echo from a sociological group in your sex on your age, a real echo. Because he is sincere, because it is positive because it has some originality (some cultural digressions).
I think he has a much greater educational value than a development manual staff, and I think it can work.
So my feeling and my analysis that I'll book market.
- Muriel, August 7, 2009 (reading of the manuscript v3):
I am sure to see him soon in bookstores. Finally a book for men, written by a man (and therefore necessarily of interest to girls), it will not go unnoticed.
